I fell in love with a magician—
words bled red
as the trough of laughter
swallowed fears,
but I was the final act
and he disappeared.
© Grace Black
Written for dVerse Open Link Night #153
I fell in love with a magician—
words bled red
as the trough of laughter
swallowed fears,
but I was the final act
and he disappeared.
Written for dVerse Open Link Night #153
That takes a talent…to say so much, so well in so few words. I love the last lines best!
What a lovely comment. Thank you!
A magician can be all show, and has a way of disappearing… But can we really not love them?
Hmmm, enigmatic! Great choice of deceptively simple choice which open up to many possibilities…
I admire the last two lines, a contrast to the opening line ~ Love the title and crisp short lines ~
I really like this poem! Very clever, and the ending as an interesting surprise. I like the fact that you had a point to make, made it, and left the reader wanting more.
Bitter sweet end on this. You have to be careful with magicians
it may be magic in the moment, but its all sleight of hand
and too soon – POOF.
very clever write…the title and the last two lines say it all..i wonder who the real magician is…lol!!
Wow!! No words to express how perfect this is :D
I do so enjoy brevity, when someone says something in a few words – to the point and spot on – instead of feeling they have to keep writing and writing….this comment is longer than the poem :-) Excellent work.
Well that packed a punch! Love the “final act” ending.
I read this totally differently than the rest. If you were the final act, then you were his last conquest. And if the magician disappeared, then maybe just that part of him disappeared. I think he fell in love with you two, and you had a beautiful life together, full of healthy entertainment and laughter. Although, another possibility I’m left with is that you were both in love with each other, but then he died. I’m sure I’m wrong on all counts; this is just what I see.
Magician lives
waiting
sinking
rising
falling
making
Life
Again..
Magic
heArt
singing spiRit
dancing mind and
body souls balancING
Living Light Living Love
Magic Feat
step
beat
again..:)
i guess that’s the nature of magicians… and maybe makes part of their spell they have on us… oy
Nicely written. The disappearing act was the perfect metaphor for this piece.
Very neatly written and yet so powerful – I love this.
This is clever and playful but also deep and insightful…..love that brilliance :-)
wry… ~